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Thursday, September 21, 2006

Om-kas-toe by Care-bear10 (1B)

This book was exciting from beginning to end. It started when Om's mother saved his twin sister's life, when the village wanted her to die because they thought twins were bad luck. Instead of bad luck, Om and his sister gave good luck to the tribe. Om found a raven and named him Wise Bird because of the wonders the bird did. Wise Bird saved Om's life many times in this book. He was practically human and he was Om's best friend. I don't want to give away the ending, so there's only one way to find out.

1 Comments:

Blogger rightwriters said...

Nice introduction and conclusion! They mirror each other very well. Good details to explain how exciting it was!

In the second to last sentence, instead of using "and" twice there, try using a comma or dividing it into two sentences to get rid of one of those "ands."

Nice job!!

Mama Hen

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